Since the dawn of civilisation until today, money played vital role in each society. It shapes our thought, behaviours and life. There have been always discussion about its role. Some people consider that it is much more siginificant earning more money than doing job which people like. However, others think that people should work a job which they interest. From my vantage point, I am with the former group and the line will shed light on my viewpoint.
First reason which deserves some word is health standard. People do not want to live in big cities due to pollution such as air and noise. Even if you live there it may many illness and of course to cure it costly. Individuals should choose good payment job to afford just because this costs.A vivid example which can be given into the subject is my own example. I had mental illness two years ago since the stressed work life. Even simple theartment costed lost of money. If I could not have private insurance, I could not pay it.
In approaching this issue, apart from what mentioned above, there is another subtle point which borne in mind. Money is a key to discover yourself again and again. It allow to allocate enough money to create new interest. A refreshingly intelligent statistics, reveals by recent research conducted at MIT University, shows that there is a correlation between money and creativity. According to the research study workers who has good salaries are tend to be creative than less earners since they discover new interests.
To wrap it up, one can conclude that money is significant for our life to life better and long. I believe that everybody should work in a job which offers more money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun illness seems to be countable; consider using: 'many illnesses'.
Suggestion: many illnesses
...nd noise. Even if you live there it may many illness and of course to cure it costly. Indivi...
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Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...t job to afford just because this costs.A vivid example which can be given into t...
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Line 5, column 168, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'allows'?
Suggestion: allows
...o discover yourself again and again. It allow to allocate enough money to create new ...
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Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'allocating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: allocating
...over yourself again and again. It allow to allocate enough money to create new interest. A ...
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Line 5, column 448, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...study workers who has good salaries are tend to be creative than less earners since ...
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Line 5, column 473, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun earners is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...d salaries are tend to be creative than less earners since they discover new interes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, apart from, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80412371134 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44785969767 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.646048109966 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3749531835 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.55 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226591556721 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057401066728 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615249543778 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140403565817 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673919482183 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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