"Movies and Television strongly infleunce the way people behave" use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

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"Movies and Television strongly infleunce the way people behave" use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

Some people believe that working three days a week is more enjoyable and they prefer this kind of working to others. personally I believe that it depends on your goal of work. if the money is important to you, so you have to choose whichever earns much more money. I think if we notice to work hours alone, I prefer tgree days a week. I feel like this way for three reason, which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, if you work less time a week you will have much more time doing other things you enjoy. I mean when have much more free time you have a wide choices to spend your time with. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. when I was freshman, I've worked in an office as a secretary. I worked three days a week and I earned money while I was studying, therefore, I had a job and I studied at the same time. if I worked much more time a week, I couldn't studied so this wasn't my own goal.

Moreover, working less time a week saves more energy for you and it has two benefits. First, you can focus on your job to do it as well as you can and it can make you to improve at your job. Second, if you don't use your whole energy to work, you will be healthy and fresh. Back to my example, if i worked more time in a week and studied at same time, it could hurt me and maybe I didn't do that work anymore.

Finally, I wonder working five days a week makes your life repititive because you don't have enough time to spend for doing enjoyable things. For instance, my friend works six days a week full-time and she is never in our parties and everything. when we see her, she is always tired and she always sleeps on weekends, therefore, she thinks she is alive to work alone.

In conclusion, I am of opinion that, it is more enjoyable to work three days a week. this is because having more free time, having more energy and making life not repetitive.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, i feel, i mean, i think, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.14713896458 4.8611393121 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19684779157 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465940054496 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.8249344175 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.1 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0403955601785 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0185371877227 0.076458572812 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0249962293789 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0261829328332 0.150856017488 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203451112165 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.79 10.9000537634 62% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.47 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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