In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?
As we all know, the priority of a country or a region is to develop its economy. With the gradually increasing income, the tourist industry is considered the most profitable and friendly environmental method to earn money. When coming with the improvement of tourist, some governments may choose to invest in repairing old things in the country. In my perspective, however, improving safety by hiring more police may be more effective.
First of all, safety can influence people when they choose a destination. Thanks to the advanced technology, we can access the latest information about other countries or regions. People tend to avoid dangerous places where do not have good social security when they want to enjoy the holiday. Germany is a classic example. According to the China Daily, the number of Chinese tourists travelling to Germany decline after the refugee trend by 10 percent. The majority will guarantee their safety at first. Thus, no good social condition, no good development of tourist.
In the second place, there are increasing needs to maintain social security when a place develops the tourist industry. Social safety, which is one of the services provided by the government, play an important role in tourists’ feelings. When people come to a foreign place, they really need help from the police when they encounter some incidents. They will never have comfortable and enjoyable experience if they cannot find the policeman in time, which might make a really bad impression about the place. The tourists will not come back or even post some complains online. In that case, the tourist of this place cannot go a long way.
In addition, it is unnecessary to repair old buildings and streets. These historic things are more attractive when they keep their original appearance without any repair. In most case, people are more likely to add some features which they think are welcomed by modern tourists. However, most of them turn to be useless. People love the one hundred percent ancient things which they can learn from some historical information. Some restoration and improvement of old buildings and streets are actually damaging them. That is to say, the original scenes of a country or region is attractive enough.
In conclusion, the government can attract more tourists by improving social safety. It is worthwhile to put money in hiring more police rather than repairing old stuff. Only by doing this, the tourist industry will develop in a longer run.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in the second place, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13725490196 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70278577433 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546568627451 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2715193441 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6296296296 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1111111111 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.37037037037 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25226104852 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705261832667 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931561774958 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167709935422 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115433864236 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.94 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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