In order to became financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays there are not a lot of parents who give their children pocket money. But those who do have observed that their children tend to understand about finance responsibility clearly. In my opinion children should be given pocket money or some amount of money. I completely agree with this, personally I believe that giving them money at young age will make them understand financial responsiblity in future. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the upcoming paragraphs.
First of all, if the young adults have no idea how to manage finance then the tend to waste their money on useless and unwanted things. So it is important to give young children money and the knowledge of how to spend them efficiently. A personal experience is great example of this my sister was never give pocket money while she was young, but when she got a job an started earning money. By looking at her you could tell that she didn't know how and where to spend them, because in the beginning she used to shop alot, go to dinners, parties, and keep buying gifts and ended up spending her whole salary.
Secondly, young children learn to save atleast a small amount of the given money, however small it may be. That habit can help them in future to save more to fulfil their dreams or buy a house or anything. Drawing from a known own experience of a friend who was given pocket money since her 5th grade, and I remember her mother always insisted her to atleast save 3$ from the 10$ given to her. And got used to that habit, and once a year she used to take something big or expensive with the saved money. Once she also took a dress for her mother's birthday as a gift as a surprise. Eventually she started saving great amount of money and also invested money in good places. Recently she took a huge house as she wanted and a new launched Audi car by herself. It certainly clear to see why it essential to children should be given money so that they learn to manage their own money at a young age.
To strongly believe that for an adult to become financially responsible they to start learning that from a young age, which will eventually become a habit because that is what going to help your fullfill your dream partially and stop you from wasting money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, i feel, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49029126214 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34864683487 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521844660194 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0838802583 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.777777778 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8888888889 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316144853473 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102576925989 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906610312406 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195076845613 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408017141815 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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