In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age
The money, a universally accepted medium of exchange should be used efficiently and purposefully by every person. However, to become financially responsible one should learn to manage money in their childhood. I feel like this because of two reasons which I'm going to expose in the following essay.
One should know the value of money if they manage money during their childhood. Everyone agrees on the fact that what we learned as a child will become part of our life. For instance, when I was a child, my father compelled me to do households and gardening in our backyard. Initially, I disdained his comments, later my other siblings are obeying him which attracted me to those works. Progressively, he gave us a small sum after our jobs according to our ages. My younger sister and brother got 5$ each and I earned 10$, which not only provides us with discipline but with good money-saving skills. I collected and saved all the money that I got and I used it for various purposes like buying clothes, lending money to others, for emergencies etc..This habit consequently ameliorates my money management. When I was an adult, I know how to handle money and make transactions even in a bank. I can say in confidence that my father made me a responsible adult in financial matters. As you can see, children learning to manage money have a strong impact on their adult life to become financially responsible.
Another benefit of children being learned to manage and control their money at a young age is developing an autonomous man. Taking responsibilities is an important step to be an independent person, and these accountabilities become easy to handle when a person had experienced them before. Moreover, it is worthier to teach children at a young age managing their financial issue in order to become an accountable person when they at an adult age. To prove this opinion, I had read research on this topic. In the study, a survey conducted by several scientists in 14 major cities in Turkey shows that ninety-one percent of people learned their financial responsibilities during their childhood and become they can manage their accountabilities more comfortably. In addition, these persons can manage stress and attempt new fields in their life. For that reason, I personally think it is more successful to let children learn their responsibilities from a young age in which they likely become familiar with these responsibilities in the future.
In sum, I strongly believe that for a responsible adult in the future, they should manage money during their childhood. Through parent's and elder's support, we can support our children to become successful in their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, i feel, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00223713647 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01032128563 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519015659955 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7233764643 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.636363636 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3181818182 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.59090909091 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.500232058603 0.236089414692 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150067005212 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143281499427 0.0737576698707 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.308865956076 0.150856017488 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809183080196 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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