Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that it is very important that children learn and practice to manage their own money from the primary ages. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that children at the young age should have complete freedom in everything and parent should not compel them for managing their money, because it maybe has dad effect on their mind. I, to a great extent, disagree with this idea that children should learn to have planned for their money and responsible for their decision.
First and foremost, most psychologists believe that each kind of good behavior shapes mainly at the young age. If children do not learn to accept the responsibility of their works they would not become the independent person in their future life. Thus, psychologists suggest that parents avoid buying everything that their children want. Children should save their obvious money that takes from their parents, to buy their interesting things.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that we can see a lot of people around ours that they faced with the huge problem in their life because of lack inability of true managing their budget. For example, we have a neighborhood that a mouth age they investigated to sell their home because they borrow the high number of money from different people for a wedding ceremony for their daughter. But, unfortunately, they could not bring back this money at the right time to the people. Therefore, they should sell their house to can pay their borrow. So, we should take attention because we cannot be predicted the future.
Finally, yet importantly, children should learn patient on using from their own money. Most of the children expend their money just on the first day. But, they should learn to have patience and a good plan to manage their money to receive their special thighs that they want to have. Till it becomes a habit on their life to have this patient in their future life.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above I am convinced that children should learn to manage their own money at young age, to become responsible person in their future life, Because the young age is the best time for creating useful behavior in children minds and changing an incorrect belief is very hard work in the adults.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practice managing'.
Suggestion: practice managing
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Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
... managing their money, because it maybe have dad effect on their mind. I, to a great...
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Line 1, column 472, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...idea that children should learn to have plan for their money and responsible about t...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...behavior shape aminly at the young age. If children do not learn to accepting risp...
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Suggestion:
...onsibility of their works they would not become indipendent person in their futur...
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Suggestion:
...ndent person in their future life. Thus, spsychologists suggest that parents avoi...
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Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'saved'?
Suggestion: saved
...heir children wants. Children should be save their obvious maney that take from thei...
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Message: Did you mean 'sold'?
Suggestion: sold
...o the people. Therefore, they should be sell their house to can pay their borrow. So...
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Message: Did you mean 'learned', 'learnt'?
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...ly, yet importantly, children should be learn pateint on using from their own money. ...
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Message: Did you mean 'learned', 'learnt'?
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...t on the first day. But, they should be learn to have patient and a good plan to mana...
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Suggestion: an
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Line 9, column 291, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...children minds and changing a incorrect believe is very hard work in the adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87719298246 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43430527551 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486215538847 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.5236549541 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.470588235 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4705882353 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.463432869669 0.236089414692 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175101743565 0.076458572812 229% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971958791191 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318950037313 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.099480162593 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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