Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that famous people like any other citizen have this right of desirable privacy. But unfortunately, they have not an adequate secure life. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that the well-known entertainers now have enough privacy and the source of lack of safety is just their own behavior in the society and the information they share in the public social networks, to attract people attention to themselves. However, I to a great extent, agree with this idea that famous people deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
First and foremost, there are some misbeliefs in people minds that the famous people should have a very friendly relationship with their adherent and it means that people have this allow to communicate with famous people in anywhere and any time. For example, last week I when I had lunch with my friend at the restaurant, we meet a favorit actor on here where he was very angry from one person who wants to take a photograph with him. Because the actor was within a serious discussion with his wife and they man interrupt them. However, everybody needs some privet time otherwise this kind of happens can threaten their mental health and happiness.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that some of the social networks try to take advantage from their fame between people through using their name or sharing some of their privet photos in their websites to increase their viewers. Sometimes may some culprits people try to extortion from famous people by frightening them of transmitting some of their personal information in public. In addition, I know that there is some criminal groups in the film industry or popular sports, who want to manipulate profits in these industries to their own favior. Even may through the distribution of fake news about famous people to force them to accept their request.
Finally, yet importantly, famous people like other ones are not exempt from the mistake. Maybe they occasionally become angry during driving but it is not true that people abuse from this kind of event in opposes of them. Obviously, a driving debate does not affected our job position or our future life. So we should respect the right of famous people similar to other ones.
On the basis of reasons that was mentioned above, I am convinced that well-known people deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Because in the present condition their happiness, healthy of the social and family life of them is not appropriate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'communicating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: communicating
...nd it means that people have this allow to communicate with famous people in anywhere and any ...
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Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...uld be taken into consideration is that some of the social networks try to take advantage f...
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Line 7, column 260, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...m. Obviously, a driving debate does not affected our job position or our future life. So...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, still, well, for example, in addition, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95150115473 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51821921811 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526558891455 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1814052062 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.111111111 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0555555556 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196086975383 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781065328397 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109898863301 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140239985451 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110940001967 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.