Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As the entertainment industry develops, I do believe that famous people should have more privacy than they have now. Though it may be frustrating for their fans if they do not receive their idle's news, it do bring more righteousness and benefits to the society and individuals. In the following passages, I will state my reasons clearly as follows.

First of all, I think that everyone has its own privacy, even for famous entertainers and athletes. Imagine a group of people that stalk you all day when you are out shopping, picnic, or even showering. Before your every move, you need to be really careful and be skeptical the all time. Isn't that exhuasting? That is the daily life of a celebrity. They never stop to pretend in order to show the best side of themselves onto the news. However, people get tired. It is the time for them to have more privacy and really enjoy every moment with their families and friends.

Next, from a celebrity's point of view, all those attentions sometimes only cause trouble and problems. Indeed, they earn more moneys and they chose to have their life publicize. However, they still preserve their right after work. Often times, there are pictures about celebrities' family life, which may not receive the celebrity's consent. For those who never think about making his other families public, they will feel really furious and disrespectful. The consequence sometimes turns out to be worse. Once the picture of a celebrity's daughter went wild online, some fans even pursue after her when she got out of school. This inevitably raises some concerns about celebrities' safety.

Moreover, people should stop online stalking the idles for their own sakes. Some of my friends never stop watching their idle's news, wasting most of their time on social media. The time people spend on stalking the celebrities should be put to better use. Admittedly, as fans, people still have the urge to know everything about their idles. Yet, even if there's little constraints on one's attention about the entertainers, the quality of their life would improve greatly.

In my opinion, it seems like cliche to always talk about how celebrities should have their own private, yet the importance of it should be reinforced. If their privacy is highly valued, they would have immersed in the family time more happily and safely. Also, the fans should shift the main focus on their lives rather than on the idle's lives. Thus, here I restate my opinion that famous entertainers should have more privacy than they do today.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...safely. Also, the fans should shift the main focus on their lives rather than on the idles...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, thus, i think, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93925233645 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46748884073 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532710280374 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8006501927 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2857142857 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221254800112 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624425676744 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093115446535 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148949186604 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100605864555 0.0645574589148 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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