Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

In this contemporary world, the television actors and athletes plays a significate role to entertain the people. Although, some may not support the idea of deserving their secret about their life. In my opinion, television entertainer and athletes should give more privacy than today and this essay will explain why.

One of the reason's why entertainer's should give privacy is that they have a right to get freedom. Nowadays, due to advancement of technology, their privacy no longer remain secret as some audience really make judgement about their life such as the things they do and toll them by making fun of them. When it such things occurs, their secret and personal life get interfered. For example, if the artist are doing some awful things when he is at his locality, people tend to make video of it and they are being criticized. Thus, it has lead to depression and anxiety when people provoke and bother's their life by repressing them from whatever they do.

Another reason is they deserve to be respected. It is mainly because they help people to free from stress and bored. If there is no one to entertain people, they is prospect that people engage in different activities like molesting, maul and addiction to drugs. With the help of those celebrity, it had made people's life more engaging and they are prohibited from going wrong way. For example, in this modern era, young people are vulnerable to risk and with the television entertainer, people are staying home and refrain from doing wrongful things. As a result, the entertainer should be given more privacy to enjoy their life to the fullest.

In conclusion, the well-known entertainer and athletes should be deserve more privacy than in the past because each individual's of artist have their rights to get freedom and also they helped people from stress and from bored by letting them engaged in other activities.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, really, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94043887147 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54242217884 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526645768025 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9372975916 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.066666667 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21155597076 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824373262256 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552778374784 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143369761657 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201751283405 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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