In the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms However there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in ele

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In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients’ medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.

Reducing Costs

First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients’ records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.

Preventing Errors

Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients’ health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.

Aiding Research

Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors’ offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.

The reading passage and the lecture are both related to the benefits of using electronic databases. While the author of the reading strongly approve the use of electronic databases, the lecture, on the other hand, thinks that the benefits are certain.

To begin with, the author claims as the electronic records are used, it will cut down the money in storing and transferring paper records. However, the lecturer refutes this idea by saying that this will not have significant effect in saving money. Because most of the doctors still prefer to keep hand-written records for emergency use, and also sometimes signatures are needed for legal reference, paper records will still cost.

Secondly, as the reading points out that using electronic device will decrease the man-made errors for its standardization of form and legitimate font, the lecturer strongly refuse the idea. For in most situation, it is the assistants who need to interpret the prescription that still written by most doctors. This means there are still chance for errors to exist. Thus, the lecturer doubts if the errors will be prevented.

Finally, the author points out that the use of electronic record will benefit the medical research in terms of collecting large amount of data. In contrast, the lecturer points out the laws of medical record is rather rigid. A lot of process are needed before one can get the medical record, also personal permission is also required. Thus, even though electronic devise can help to gather information, the lecturer still casts doubt on the saying that it will aid research since the condition for accessing medical records remains harsh.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, in contrast, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 269.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16356877323 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57106671377 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53531598513 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9105123902 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.846153846 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84615384615 7.06452816374 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146530185442 0.272083759551 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568014447737 0.0996497079465 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510864964316 0.0662205650399 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863142324447 0.162205337803 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631666562796 0.0443174109184 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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