In the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms However there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in ele

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In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.

Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.

Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.

Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location

It is a debate about whether medical records should collect electronically. Although the text finds it beneficial to create an electrical database, the woman finds it useless for some reasons. Both sides' reasons are discussed in the following paragraphs.
First, However, Reading states using electronic records can save money because less paper gets used; the woman thinks it is not certain. She assumes there will not be any savings because doctors do not throw papers out, and they will continue their traditional way so they can have a backup for emergencies. In that case, the paper store cost will remain.
Furthermore, She believes the medical errors will continue. There are some errors caused by doctors' lousy handwriting or improper transcription of data that can be detrimental to patients' health. Although the reading states that these errors will eliminate due to the use of electronic medical records, the woman disagrees. She believes the doctors will continue to use paper to take notes, and the staff will enter the information written on the paper by doctors. So, lousy handwriting will still be an issue.
At last, the reading implied that electronic records could be helpful for researchers. They can use and access an extensive database and draw out any information from any place, and it will be much easier to gain data. The woman thinks it is still going to be difficult to access information because of privacy laws. The information will be kept safe if the patients want to, and There is a strict and difficult process to reach data. Researchers should get a lot of permissions, including patients' permission which is not even granted, and patients can block their access to data.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 5.04856512141 357% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 282.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06382978723 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70374665298 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7789107009 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.25 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.625 7.06452816374 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215901416797 0.272083759551 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733198680158 0.0996497079465 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051275801149 0.0662205650399 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123164870838 0.162205337803 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149679494278 0.0443174109184 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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