Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, Celebrities are everywhere. They have always been seen in media, and their news is everywhere. They have a lot of followers on Instagram and Twitter. People love to follow celebrities' daily life. Due to the vast announcement of their lives, they can be so effective for people. Young people are more susceptible to these influences than adults. I believe in that for several reasons, which I will explore two of them in the following paragraphs.
First, a human's character shapes when he is young. There are various ways of living that a teenager can go with. Because youth are not experienced enough, they rather follow adults' paths. Teenagers always try to find a role model and follow his way. They usually choose a successful person, like a celebrity, as a role model. They think everything Celebrities do is right because they are wealthy and successful. They follow him and try to be like him. For example, my cousin's role model was Miley Cyrus. When Miley cut her hair, my cousin did it too. She was so obsessed with her that she copied every single thing Miley did. Miley had a significant impact on her.
Furthermore, Young people are more exposed to celebrities new than older people. Studies show people affect their surroundings. Adults spend a lot of time at work place, so they don't have much time to be involved with famous people's stories. Meanwhile youth have a lot of free time for that stuff. They are more online and spend more time on social media than adults. For instance, when I was in high school and university, I always followed my favorite actors. I knew every detail of their life. Most of the time, I tried to act and speak like my favorite actor. I even diy my hair like them. But, when I started working, I had no time to follow them. I had more significant problems to solve rather than following my favorite actor's style. They lost their importance to me when I grew up.
In conclusion, because young people have impressive personalities and spend more time for following celebrities, they are more affected by famouse individuals than adults. Youngsters follow famous people's life stories and try to be like them.
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Suggestion: humans'; human's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75531914894 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58599822634 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521276595745 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2212434277 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 55.875 100.406767564 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.75 20.6045352989 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228934210367 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631679250938 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615194477599 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165752758739 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046787335294 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.14 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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