Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Families play an essential role in young people's lives. Parents channel kids' decisions and way of thinking on the problems. They show children the way of living. As time passes, parents' role in leading children decreases and youngsters become independent and learn to decide for themselves. I believe in that for two reasons which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
First of all, Today's kids are more aware than their counterparts in the past. They have more knowledge about society and better insight for deciding. This knowledge and awareness come from social media. Now day's, children have access to global communication, and they can search and study everything on the media. They can connect other people that had the same situation with them before. So, they can see their decision's consequences and choose the best for themselves. Because of that, parents' influence on young lives has diminished. For instance, if a kid wanted to go somewhere, he asked his parents to take him there. But, these days, kids know how to use Google Maps and can find their way easily without their parent's help.
Furthermore, years ago, kids spent time with their parents. They worked together in the fields or family jobs, but Today, parents cannot spend much time with their children. They work most of the time to provide for their families. Meanwhile, children spend their time at school or with their friends. The family bond is not as strong as it was before. Most of the time, parents have no idea what their son or daughter is going through. This distance between families reduces parents' influence on children's lives. Parents and kids don't understand each other, So children prefer decide for themselves than share their issues with parents and explain their problems to them. For example, I remember having issues with my school tasks, and I needed someone's help. I asked my mother if she could help me to choose an extra class. Instead of helping, she started to yell at me because of my grades. I never asked for her help again.
In conclusion, Today's children are independent. They learned to live by themselves and find the answers to their questions in media. They don't rely on their parents as much as kids needed 20 years ago. They can handle themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9012987013 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45847140163 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5556810033 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.9 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.8333333333 20.6045352989 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13333333333 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259462053844 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687949869139 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495273710464 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162612566223 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030206909052 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.25 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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