Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People will be always responsible to the decisions they made and they must be ready to face their choices' consequences. No one can deny the role of parents in decision-making process of their children. Some people believe that in these times, children tend to be more depended on their parents, however, it is my firm belief that this dependency is dramatically decreasing for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, in these day and age, individuals are overwhelmed with the wide range information sources. This could be misleading in some cases, however, I think the access to these amount of data could help everyone to be released from the dependency on other's opinions when making a decision. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience in the process of choosing the appropriate major in my gradate studies. My enrollment in my bachelor degree was the result of my consultation with my parents, however, in my gradate studies, my only consultant was the data from the internet. For this reason children are more independent on their decisions these days.
In addition, having a wide range networks are an important factor that may effect children's preferences. By the help of internet and social medias, people are more likely to be connected to each other. This can happen in whether working networks or other communities. Drawing from my own experience, when looking back to my professional career, one of the most important factors that led me to this step, was using LinkedIn as a source of useful information and advices choosing my field of expertise. It is certainly clear to see why parent's role is obviously decreasing.
In light of the reasons mentioned, although there are always exceptions which are excluded from a general rule, I strongly believe that children are becoming more and more autonomous in their life decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this day' or 'these days'?
Suggestion: this day; these days
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, i think, in addition, in some cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02134146341 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87913212093 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545731707317 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3059026915 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.642857143 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148538229958 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608775912241 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058225117119 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956081294373 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628039097905 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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