In the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms However there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in ele

The reading passage and the lecture are both about using electronic medical record systems instead of traditional paper-based record systems. While the author of the passage argues that storing patients' medical records electronically is beneficial and has some advantages, the professor disputes this claim. She states that all the advantages discussed in the reading are very uncertain. The lecturer casts doubt on the points made in the passage by providing three controversial reasons.

In the passage, the author begins by saying that paper records require a remarkable amount of storage, and storing patients' medical records electronically can save some money since, in this way, it is not required to spend money on storing and transferring medical records. However, the professor disagrees with this idea. She asserts that stockpiling medical records electronically does not cause any savings since doctors will not through patients' paper records away. They still have to keep them as a backup. Consequently, Stocking these paper records still costs money.

Furthermore, according to the reading passage, electronic medical records will reduce the chance of medical errors. Traditionally, doctors have to write down information by hand, and their improper handwriting may cause some errors in some cases. On the other hand, the professor points out that electronic medical records cannot eliminate this issue because doctors, even those using the electronic method, still use paper and pen to write prescriptions. Their staff has the duty of entering those data into the database, so doctors' poor handwriting may still bring about some errors if the staff cannot read the information properly.

Finally, the author believes that researchers can have access to patients' medical records if they are stored electronically. Not surprisingly, the professor refutes this assertion by contending that having access to patients' medical information is so difficult since the United States have some strict regulation about patients' private information. Researchers cannot have access to patients' medical data unless they get so many permissions, including patients' permissions, which is a very strict procedure.

All in all, both the lecturer and the author hold conflicting views on storing patients' medical records electronically.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, while, in some cases, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 1373.03311258 145% => OK
No of words: 350.0 270.72406181 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69428571429 5.08290768461 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90308913584 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488571428571 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 419.366225166 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7161983939 49.2860985944 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.235294118 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437837356372 0.272083759551 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140854127914 0.0996497079465 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0976860485804 0.0662205650399 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251203307103 0.162205337803 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427874994986 0.0443174109184 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 12.2367328918 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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