In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients* health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The reading passage and the lecture are mainly about whether doctors should adopt electronic medical record system or not. According to the passage, there have several advantages; however, the professor in the conversation does not think it is a good idea.
According to the passage, using electronic record would reduce the costs because paper records usually need a large amount of storage space, but for electronic records, they take up virtually no space, and the costs using on electronic record is much less than the paper record. On the other hand, the professor argues that due to doctors usually like to write the paper records as the backup for an emergency situation, so the cost would not be lowered.
The author claims that electronic records are more likely in standard form and suitable computer fonts, so that could reduce the possibility of human error. Nevertheless, the professor in the lecture presents that doctors always get used to examining the patient with the pen, so they can take notes and write the prescription for them. In this way, the handwriting would not be changed, and the staff members need to input it into a computer system, so the illegible handwriting would exist as usual because they cannot spell it in right way.
The author suggests that due to the advantage of many electronic medical records, we can use these records for medical research. as for paper records, it is impossible to achieve. On the contrary, the professor argues that there has difficulty in using these records for medical research because there has a strict privacy law, and people who want to use need to get permission from patients, but patients usually are not willing to share their records, and that would be more complicated. So, it would be an exaggeration to say that it would help medical research.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...use these records for medical research. as for paper records, it is impossible to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, so, as for, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 307.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97394136808 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.560471931 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498371335505 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 476.1 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.51434878587 396% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.5462305946 49.2860985944 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.818181818 110.228320801 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9090909091 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 7.06452816374 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220960219225 0.272083759551 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930326319422 0.0996497079465 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760371250103 0.0662205650399 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148793004875 0.162205337803 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052471864286 0.0443174109184 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.3589403974 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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