Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The statement that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict is commonly discussed. While some people hold that opinion, I consider it bearable so as to remain a harmonious society. In the following passages, I will clearly illustrate my reasons.
Admittedly, there are more and more rules that is enacted to regulate especially young people. For example, people under certain age cannot ride or drive, as well as drink and smoke. Also, young people that has not reached a certain age cannot involved in sex industry and cannot enter places like web cafe. Although the rules and punishments are there to restrict youngster, I believe it is out the the reasons to protect and educate them.
As regard to protecting the youngster, the notable law is the legal age to smoke and drink. Back in the early days, when there are no such rules, the campus sometimes are involved with gangsters due to cigarette selling, sometimes even drug selling. When there is no rules to confine the youngsters and teenagers, there is high chances that they will thus hurt their bodies. This kind of "trend" among students are especially imposed due to the peer-pressure. In the contrary, for society nowadays, there is no such serious concern about students smoking and drinking on the campus because there are strict rules to abide by, which also helps students from the harm of cigarettes and drinks.
While another reason to obey the rules is because by that, the youngster can be educated for things they should not do in their lives. For example, without serious rules, a youngster may make inferior choices in their life, like being sex-involved with another teenager, which are illegal in the modern society. Since most of the youngsters under 20 are still in school, they are not financially independent from their parents. If the teenage girl is pregnant, they would not be able to raise a kid, and in the end the girl may need to go through abortion. Whether if they want the baby is going to cost a lot for both families. However, thanks to today's laws, youngsters is forbidden to have sex with people under certain age, which is to educate people to have wiser choices in their lives.
From the reasons above, I believe I can draw the conclusion that the rules in the present society is not too strict for young people to obey. As the laws protect the youngsters from hurting themselves, and also offer better choices for them to follow, the benefits of the laws outsmart the downsides of them. Thus, here I restate my standpoint that the rules young people have to obey are not too strict.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, as to, for example, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81758241758 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50426420536 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49010989011 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6167282493 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.380952381 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236624445752 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784212750333 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114796816961 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160463516526 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112658896121 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.