Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
There are always different opinions on how parents should award their children whenever they do a good job in school. The most common way is to give out money to appreciate their hard work. However, as far as I am concerned, I do not stand for this way of awarding children, because it has more disadvantages than advantages. The reasons are as followed.
While it is true that money could serve as a motive for children to study and get high score, the motive itself is poisonous. In my high school, there was a time when students could get money when they score high. Yet as soon as the policy was abolished, some of the students didn't work that hard as before. Apparently, this method had served as a wrong motive for student to learn. Learning should be self-driven and inspiring. Furthermore, it is said that one should learn for oneself, not for other things. If money is involved, learning would lose its true color.
Second, most kids are not aware of how to use money in a correct way, thus giving them money is not appropriate. Take myself as an example, I never saved those money I earned from the scholarship, instead, I spent it lavishly on some toys and candies. What it left for me was just vain happiness and a mouth of cavities. Thus, I strongly believe that only if one is well educated on managing money properly could he be able to hold that award.
Also, there are better ways to award a child when they get high score in the school. For instance, parents could buy them more books to read, which are not in the curriculum. Most students now don't get the chance to read books other than textbooks. This may encourage the child to absorb more knowledge and in a way entertain himself as well. Or parents could plan a field trip, which, too, enables the child to learn from the mother nature.
In my opinion, though giving out money could sometimes do the trick to enhance children's learning motives, it would be better if they know who they are actually learning for, and the importance of money usage. Moreover, there're multiple ways to award a child. More ways that convey parents' care about a child doesn't necessarily involve money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60206718346 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4129940002 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.371025846 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4347826087 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8260869565 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04347826087 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283401310388 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759545528126 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698463603555 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162527972875 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596313223132 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.