Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of offering money to student for every success in the school exams. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely take this idea as a booster which could help school-age children in their exams. It is my firm belief that supporting children in their educational milestones is a very effective idea for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, offering bonuses such as financial bonuses will have a great impact on student's performances because, when children are seeking success in their school exams, it could be frustrating handling all the aspects of mental and, physical concentration. In such situation, knowing that success in will bring you a sensible outcome rather than just shaping your future, it could be very motivative. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I remember when I was studying at elementary school, once I got really exhausted of trying to be prepared for the mathematic exam and the only thing that helped me to continue studying was a promise that my father gave me which was a notable amount of money to go to the cinema with my friends at the end of the exam's period. As a result, I did not give up and fortunately I got a high score in mathematics that year. For this reason, I think having a motivation is necessary to handle such situation.
Secondly, it always feels good having enough money to take care of personal hobbies, specially for school-age children. Drawing from my own experience, it was really frustrating when I could not afford the financial needs of my personal hobbies. For me, nailing school exams were always an opportunity to gain rewards, specially money to take care of my personal activities such as sport classes. Consequently, I was trying really hard because I knew that the end of such effort was gaining money. It is certainly clear to see why this idea could have a huge impact on student's performances.
In light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly support the idea of offering prizes for every success in the grades during the shool.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, really, second, secondly, so, i think, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74898117617 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531578947368 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.4627713404 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.6 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260452475264 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919492400804 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065483263039 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171007464362 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602430424854 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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