It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that people life condition are titely related to each orther, each kind of happens that maybe occured around the world whould be direrctly or even indirectly affected all of people in the world. Thus, it is important to know about events happening around the world, even it seems to does not affected our life. Contrary, to this popular beliefs, there are still those who argue that it is not reasonable that we spend our time to know about events that occured in very distant areas and it is just wasting time. I, to a great extent agree with this idea that we should serve time to know about events happening around the world.
First and foremost, all of events in some way can affected the life of other people in the world. For example, if we have quick veiw to events in recent years, we could see these effects. When a desoster happen for a country that it is the main producer of petrol the price of oil increase considerablely in all of national bazares. Therefore, this happen can have very important role on busenes company that in each ways are dependent to oil. Like a war between Kovate and Iraqe several year ago, that led to a hug rise in the price of oil in the world. In addition, at that time the price of pertrol influenced on cost of most of the products and services that seems were not related to petrol.
Another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that this is a very important task for all of people to be responsible about each other. It is very important that we know how other people living in other country. For example, in some poor countries sometimes it is happen that their governments' or even some violent groups do some harmful acte toward people, it is could be very helpful if people in another countries wants from their governments' to involve in the situation and try to solve problem. Like some fight that happened in Somalia.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that people should be know and be sensitive about the events that occured around the world. Because, these happens can affeced their own life and also it is our humanitarian task to have attention to life condition of other people in the world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'do'.
Suggestion: do
...ning around the world, even it seems to does not affected our life. Contrary, to thi...
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Line 1, column 327, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...nd the world, even it seems to does not affected our life. Contrary, to this popular bel...
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Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
... in some poor countries sometimes it is happen that their governments or even some vio...
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Line 5, column 387, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
... do some harmful acte toward people, it is could be very helpful if people in anot...
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Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'known'?
Suggestion: known
...e, I am convinced that people should be know and be sensitive about the events that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, even so, for example, in addition, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59850374065 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38153960647 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456359102244 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6845047159 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9375 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314136653145 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122368685607 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124857321385 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209324257651 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118426037293 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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