Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that financial managing like any other skills should teach to children during their childhood. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that children must live completely free and happy, forcing children to manage their money give up happiness from them, and they would have a lot of time to learn it in the future. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that in order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
First and foremost, children are more flexible to learn helpful skills and behaviors than adult ones. For example, I knew some adults who are not successful in maintaining their own money, and it leads to they have difficulty in supporting their own family. My uncle uses the main portion of his income to buy some expensive products which are out of his budget. It caused his wife left him last year. After that happen he tries so hard to change his habit, unfortunately, he has not been successful in it.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that financial planning like other skills needs a lot of practice to be effectively learned. For instance, we study mathematics in school for several years to become a skillful person on it. We experienced some failures, whereby had learned some new lesson. Sometimes we should force ourselves to try again and again until crack it. If people make some financial mistakes in teenage life, their living would not be affected seriously. Nonetheless, financial failures in the adult period would be terrible.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that children must learn to manage their own money at a young age. Because it is the ideal time for learning such these skills, and it provides them with enough time to practice this skill, and it can create some success and positive experiences about this skill in their mind.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, for example, for instance, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90178571429 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53015928252 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589285714286 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0430249892 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.9375 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426997563529 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129131086311 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.181493782507 0.0737576698707 246% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256753182074 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183143713257 0.0645574589148 284% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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