Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that we living in the a real world and in realestic view a good opportunity do not happen a lot and in this case it is very important that persons make a correct and reasonable decision. Because our imaging about our favorite job or a fantastic life not occurred in the real world. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that never people forget their fantasy and their actual aims in their life , because this issue create a very bad memorise in their mind and ca be threatened their healthy of mind. I, to a great extent agree with this idea that we should not lost a good and secure job position because it could not quite satisfying ours.
First and foremost, we never can not find a job position which have all of our favorite factors. Today, we live in a very competative job condition and a wonderful job need a lot number of different ability and silks and experience. Surely, we cannot achieve this mentioned requirements just through waiting. While, through getting avaliable job we obtain very great chance to increase our knowledge and required ability for development. In addition, only academic degree is not enough for getting well job and we need to obtain several related job experience to obtaining practical experience.
on another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that non-activity and waiting home without any responsability after sometimes can be led to decreased in person interest for working and prone to undredog. Furthermore, the psychologist beliefs that the possibility of deprision in this people are very higer than secound group. Certanly, if we do not use from our knowlegade in the jobs during the time this information become weak on our brain. And this condition prode horrible stuation for person.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above I am convinced that we should not never lost our opportunity for success because of hope to better propose, because of mentally healthy and real condition of our society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worked', 'wrought'?
Suggestion: worked; wrought
...rve a lot of time for intense should be work for some year with a low salary to find...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'lowed', 'lowered'.
Suggestion: lowed; lowered
... consideration is that people have very lower chance of success in the job that it is...
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Line 5, column 258, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...he tasks that it is not interesting for who become Discouraged and unwilling toward...
^^^
Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...ple who leave their job after some year because of they unable to continue the unfavorite job. ...
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Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'alined'.
Suggestion: alined
...ld wait and try to find the job that is aline with our aim. Because of importance eff...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, thus, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43927648579 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31247238411 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480620155039 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3830087097 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.058823529 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7647058824 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70588235294 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265852977269 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913124021222 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689174112003 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168554136362 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053365579658 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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