In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money young age

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In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money young age

It is undoubtedly true that everyone needs to have financial sense so as to survive in life.Although some people believe that kids should cultivate the habits of spending money judiciously right from their developmental age before they fully mature.More importantly, I believe that the younger generation should imbibe the culture of being economical with their spending.I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.

First of all, children these days are so insouciant that they only consider today they don’t look at what the future holds, and as a result,they grow older with overwhelming challenges which might eventually put them on thin ice.A preliminary study carried out by the finance department at the University of florida deduce that when kids spend wisely at their youth age it makes them independent in life, because they can easily handles any troubles that arises.
My personal experience is a clear illustration of this.I remember when I was twelve ,I lost my mum to the cold hand of death.She was entombed on that same day due to islamic rites.At that time,I was bereaved because i thought i will have to halt my academics, however, I was able to continue with my academics due to the way she raised us.I can recall then that she is always cranky whenever we spend all the money we got from relatives or family friends.Thanks to my mum who actually made me to be self-sufficient for myself by ensuring that i learnt how to save at my tender age. With this reason, it is certainly clear to see how saving money makes my academics incessant.

Furthermore, kids who utilize their resources right from a tender age are more likely to be good citizens of the country .To be more specific they will always govern a post effectively, because they will not create room for bribery and corruption which is more likely to be seen with children without financial sense.Drawing from my own experience. The governor of Idaho has been discharging his duties effectively such that people really feel more secure with his governance than the past governors.So out of curiosity,I took my time to surf the internet in order to have a clear understanding of why he frowns at illicit acts. With my findings, I was able to draw a conclusion that an armed robber pillaged his house, and killed his whole family.He was the only one spared, because at the time the operation was going on, he was gallivanting.So this ordeals actually prompted him to work, and also continues his academic. Besides, not only did he show a good leadership skill, but also cultivate the act of utilizing resources effectively.

In light of the above reasons mentioned, I am of the opinion that in order to show financial responsibility when old, one needs to be economical at a tender age, because it makes one independent and also produces good citizens to the

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actually, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, then, as to, i feel, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2406.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91020408163 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86414884473 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54693877551 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 20.1344086022 268% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 153.776252401 48.9658058833 314% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 267.333333333 100.406767564 266% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.4444444444 20.6045352989 264% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.1111111111 5.45110844103 259% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 44.0 5.5376344086 795% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120691185954 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531252842757 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476183957576 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0785245677753 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413693372827 0.0645574589148 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.9 11.7677419355 246% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 16.67 58.1214874552 29% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 10.1575268817 240% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.09 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 10.002688172 295% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.0537634409 235% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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