Human relationship has always been one of the most important topics in our life. Regarding the best way to maintain a relationship with people we care about, a lot of people hold that we should spend as much time as possible with them. However, in my opinion, it is better to avoid spending excessively long time with people we love. The reasons are as follows.
First of all, spending less time with people we care about helps keep the relationship fresh. We will lose interest in doing something gradually if we do it too frequently. For example, some people like eating ice creams, but if they eat every day, soon ice creams will appear disgusting to them. This is especially true when it comes to lover relationship. A lot of couples have the so-called “seven-year itch” because they have stayed with each other for too long and go so used to each other. If they reduce the time spent together, and change the way they live occasionally, a long-term marriage will become like first love and they will never feel bored again.
In addition, we can better respect each other’s privacy if we reduce the time we spent together. It is in the nature of people to peek into other’s lives. Nowadays the situation becomes worse due to the invention of social media. However, deer at our heart we all crave privacy, that is free time alone, undisturbed by others. My friend Jack once had a girlfriend. He loved the girl so much that he used every time chance to be with her, afraid that she might fall in love with someone else. However, eventually the girl couldn’t tolerate him anymore and broke up with Jack. Had he left more room for the girl and reduced the time they spent together, it wouldn’t have got so bad and they could continue the relationship.
Admittedly, sometimes more time we spent with people we love will improve the relationship. For instance, a lot of young people seldom return home to visit their parents when they grow up. Even if they can express their care through buying gifts, they will not replace the time spent with them. There is a famous song in China called “often go home to visit your parents”, which bet exemplifies our parents’ hope that we spend more time with them. However, this is only true when it applies to people with whom we have been separated from for a long time. When it comes to regular relationship such as lovers or friends, based on the afore-mentioned analysis, we’d better not spend excessively long time with them.
To sum up, the better way to maintain a relationship is to reduce the time spent with people we care about because we can keep the relationship fresh and enjoy the privacy rather than spend as much as time with them.
Essay evaluation report
Even if they can express their care through buying gifts, they will not replace the time spent with them.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
flaws:
Pronouns are used more than average, like:
because
they have stayed with each other for too long and go so used to each other. If
they reduce the time spent together, and change the way they live occasionally, a long-term marriage will become like first love and
they will never feel bored again.
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For instance, a lot of young people seldom return home to visit their parents when
they grow up. Even if
they can express their care through buying gifts,
they will not replace the time spent with them.
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The objects can be used as subject to remove most of pronouns.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 482 350
No. of Characters: 2150 1500
No. of Different Words: 235 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.686 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.461 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.342 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.112 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.68 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.466 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.198 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 677, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e and they will never feel bored again. In addition, we can better respect each ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, regarding, so, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74112734864 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6602713718 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490605427975 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9131142143 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.84 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.16 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416967505806 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129729036627 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132688388176 0.0737576698707 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313337654847 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115927991459 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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