In order to make a business successful, it must spend a lot of money on advertising.
On the one hand,I accept the concept that advertising plays an important role in achieving the business success as it can effectively increase the sales and the fame of the firm’s product. However, in my opinion, there are also other vital elements in business, helping companies to become promising. My points and examples are given below.
First of all, company should take the productivity into consideration. Staffs and clerks’ working morale is directly related to the amount of their work they can produce. Hence a high morale of workers can help to increase their overall output. Hence more output can enable a greater supply, lowering the average price of their product. As people always prefer to the lower-priced product in the same industry. Thus the company can gain more share in market. So they would be able to earn more money from greater proportion of consumers. Thus, working efficiency is an important factor for firms to become thrived.
Furthermore, firms should also care about the appropriate occasion. Only firms sell their product at the appropriate time can enable themselves to maximize the amount they sold and profit they gained. For instance, during this period of pandemic, every country has significantly increased their demand for mask and other kinds of sanitation facilities, which have been nearly regarded as the necessities. So from this time, the clothing firm could convert their production to more mask-related manufacture and wine-making industry can also transform themselves into making the medical alcohol. Hence this special occasion can both help them to harvest more revenue, making them become more established.
Admittedly, I am not saying that advertising is not useless. Using the strategy of advertising can make their own products become more notable from the public. And hence this tactic could obviously improve the notability of the products, increasing the overall demand in the market. Hence more demand means more revenue that could be gained. However, the firm can not become overdependent on advertisement because they should also consider other producing factors as a whole. A comprehensive barrage of factors can actually benefit firm more. Due to the limitation of the space, I am unable to give more ideas, but I believe the cases above have already proven the validity of my point of view.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, for instance, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27513227513 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73066625035 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558201058201 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.4091252706 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6956521739 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4347826087 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0745321818636 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0227279042886 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384610911067 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0537856526761 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280357498962 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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