Part time job is beneficial for young people Do you agree or disagree with the statement Use specific reasons and details to support your answer

Nowadays, many young people are engaged to part-time job. A lot of people doubt if this is profitable for teenagers. From my point of view, a part-time job is beneficial for young people because they can buy their wants. Also, it can help them financially. Additionally, they can learn sense of responsibility.

To begin with, young people can buy their wants. Usually, their parents provide things that they need, however, parents limit what they want to buy for them like unnecessary items. On the other hand, if they get their own money through a part- time job, they can buy their wants without limit. For instance, my school senior had worked before. She saved her pay from her work, and bought things that she needed for her studies or cosmetics. Her parents also accepted her independent mind and let her work.

Next, it can help them financially. By a part-time job, they can add more money to their parents’ savings. One good example is my father who worked to help his family monetarily. Although it was a little salary, it could add to the finances and helped them.

Finally, they can learn a sense of responsibility. During the work, they meet many customers. Hence, they try to make good quality service to impress the people. Through this, they can learn how to be responsible. By this experience, they can be more mature and this can help them in the future

To sum it up, part -time job has a lot of advantages. It brings us many benefits in various ways, such as a sense of responsibility and financially.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gaged to part-time job. A lot of people doubt if this is profitable for teenager...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to sense'
Suggestion: to sense
...nancially. Additionally, they can learn sense of responsibility. To begin with, y...
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Line 9, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ense of responsibility and financially.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, however, if, so, for instance, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1271.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74253731343 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63639669764 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548507462687 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1734977423 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.5238095238 100.406767564 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.7619047619 20.6045352989 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137499852723 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516787564481 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762110520677 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941863905317 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804264000752 0.0645574589148 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.32 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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