Part-time job is beneficial for young people. Do you agree or disagree with the statement. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
By and large, young people are novice at working, so it is pivotal for them to learn how to deal with their problems by working. As a matter of fact, they should grasp an opportunity to find a part-time job in order to benefit from it. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed brings us to the moot question as to whether part-time job can be beneficial for young people or not. Some people have a disposition toward the notion that they should merely focus on their studying, yet the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that they should accomplish this task, for its implications on their life are far broader than what we commonly consider. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework.
The first focal point that prompts me to hold this idea is that part-time job can pave the way for acquiring new insights and experiences for them. In essence, it can open door to a lot of opportunities to get prospects to his work. In other words, it can open up a whole gamut of new experiences for young people. It is axiomatic that they can broaden their horizons in order to find a pragmatic approaches and viable solution to surmount their problems. Admittedly, these jobs can intensify their chance to land a profitable vocation in near future. As a case in point, there is a body of economic research that I read recently. The researchers conducted an interview with successful businessmen, the data denoted that a host of them had an experience in their youth. On balance, this finding can at least partly explain why experience is intrinsic for becoming prosperous in a given job.
Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance in this subject is that it this way they can earn some money although it may not be adequate. It should be stressed that earning money can make them more independent from their parents’ supervision. Besides, they will learn how to save their money. One of the startling facts which flabbergasted me is that some people erroneously think that young people are not mature enough to work. Up to a point, their notion does not hold water, seeing as it is based on misconception, and they are oblivious to the fact that it can help them being dependent. To spell out the importance of dependence, it should be borne in mind that every success stems from being independence. To take a personal experience as an example, last year, I attended in a colloquium. Within the scope of discussions, a university lecturer bore down the importance of independence and saving money for young students by showing some relevant statistics which revealed that most of students preferred to work as a part-time job due to the aforementioned reason.
It can be de deduced from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that part-time job can be worthwhile for young people. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating: firstly, they can gain experience from it; secondly, they can make money and be independent from the monetary provision by their parents. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my point of view. All in all, it is recommended that societies should convict a congenial situation in order to offer young people to work, because they can efficiently use their spare time, and I am sanguine about this thought which can be laudable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 339, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...iscussed brings us to the moot question as to whether part-time job can be beneficial for you...
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Line 3, column 594, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to be' or 'be'.
Suggestion: to be; be
...vious to the fact that it can help them being dependent. To spell out the importance ...
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Line 3, column 1003, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
...relevant statistics which revealed that most of students preferred to work as a part-time job du...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, as to, at least, as a matter of fact, by and large, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2894.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 609.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75205254516 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96768813016 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78851965151 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500821018062 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 890.1 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0464093408 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.76 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.36 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155631442619 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502448933166 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575871299063 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111796939015 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320347215853 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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