People attend university for many different reasons, what do you think people attend university or college?
Nowadays, it is indisputable that knowledge is becoming more and more important than before. From my perspective, it is essential to gain knowledge under a systematic procedure such as what is offered in universities and colleges. Therefore, it is imperative to go university. There are a couple of reasons to support this stance as follows:
First, Careers have become increasingly comparative. Nowadays, it is necessary for every individual to have an education career before one's career, in order to gain the essential knowledge. For instance, in past, many people were able to land and handle a job only through a period of learning as an apprentice. I remember that when I was a child, many people offered the high school students, who were reluctant to attend school, to be an apprentice instead of attending university. For example, one of my cousins quit high school to become a mechanic apprentice. As a matter of fact, attending university was optional. These teenagers would be able to have their own business when they would become mature people. On the other hand, today the number of such jobs has become limited and education is of essence for many jobs. Thus, to secure a good job or develop a comparative career with a high salary or found a successful business, individuals need to attend a university or college to be prepared for their favorite and professional career.
Second, Knowledge is still interesting for many people. They like knowledge not only for the degree given to them after the education career, but also for their personal interest in learning new things. For example, I , for one, love knowledge because I deeply believe that knowledge is power. I remember that one of my teachers in the elementary school taught me a very interesting point about the importance of knowledge in life. One day, he turned off the lights of the classroom and it became quite dark. Then he began to write a sentence on the blackboard and asked the student to read it. No one was able to read it because of the darkness. After that he turned the lights on. The sentence was "knowledge is power". "Knowledge acts as light, it makes everything clear for all, like the light made the sentence visible for us", the teacher said. Do you know somewhere better than university or college to gain the light of knowledge?
To sum up, knowledge is essential for people; both those who either love and those who need it for develop their career. I strongly believe that attending university and secure knowledge in the modern way we have today, is one of the most important blessings we have, the opportunity that the prior people were deprive of it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, such as, you know, as a matter of fact, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92290748899 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84435345492 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497797356828 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.342429173 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.16 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236051347802 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062451751672 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070174960811 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133608363251 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627094306796 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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