People can solve important problems in their daily life on their own or with the help of families. The help from the government is not necessary. Do you agree or disagree?
Our lives are full of difficulties, escaped by no one. Some people may claim we can resolve these difficulties with help and support of our families while some people propose that the government should take responsibility to pull citizens out of difficulties. As far as I am concerned, we need government in many cases where families have limitation.
Admittedly, we cannot live without families, as family numbers can pull together the strength to solve individual member’s problems, the power much more stronger than that of each individuals. For instance, when someone gets injured on legs and is unable to move freely, other family numbers can take care of the injured one’s daily life, cooking meal, cleaning room and helping shower, etc. Or when someone invests a failed project, lose lots of money, and have a huge debt as a result, his family numbers can withdraw their own money from accounts to pay off the debt. These instance can show the force of family. However, no matter how powerful help a family can support, the force of a family has limitation after all in many cases. As a result, this is why the government is needed by citizens.
Natural disaster is a good example. In 2008, Wenchuan city, China, was hit by a historically huge earthquake. Almost all buildings collapsed, leading the whole city to be destroyed and many citizens to be killed. Every family lost more or less members and nearly all poverty in this tragic earthquake, and they needed help to walk out from suffering and reconstruct their homeland. This difficult is out of the power of each family and if without the government, these people definitely cannot stand on the relic again. Moreover, the Chinese government sent a special rescue team immediately after the earthquake was detected to rescue lives. When all people were buried in collapsed buildings, without the government who could save them in time. As we know, the time is the key to save lives in natural disasters. In addition, after the completion of rescuing, the Chinese government allocated a great amount of money to reconstruct homeland and treat severely injured victims who were hopeless. If the power of a family is gathered from limited family numbers, the power of government is gathered from all citizens in this country, which is extremely stronger than that of family.
In conclusion, we need family, which is the harbor when we meet setback or get frustrated by difficulties. Nevertheless, we pay tax to government and thus it is government’s responsibility to help citizen solve some problems that overwhelm families.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...idual member’s problems, the power much more stronger than that of each individuals. For inst...
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Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun members is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...to be killed. Every family lost more or less members and nearly all poverty in this ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, while, after all, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in many cases, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04176334107 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81608030769 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5313225058 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7846971805 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.476190476 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5238095238 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2380952381 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266684152693 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661361562156 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608246450947 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159516057422 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432919534149 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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