Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The most important ways to improve the people’s health is to clean the environment.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, global economy is growing in a rapid way, people’s living condition and their disposable income increased. But people’s health is worse than before, this is because the technology has also developed very fast. Many new industries appeared and brought new things in our daily lives, but it brought many problems. For instance, during the process of producing, there may cause pollution to the environment. So, the environment began to becoming worse. People’s health will also be affected by the environment. This is a huge question waiting to solve. So, I think the most important ways to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.
Air pollution is one of the most important factors that will threat people’s health. Air pollution contains the sediments from the grounds. When wind blows it, it’ll fly into the air. And also contains the tiny particulate matters. For instance, the pm 2. 5.. When people inhale these things into their lung, it may be harmful for their health. When these things accumulate in people’s lung, it may threat people’s life. People had to wear masks to protect their health. And these particles came from the industries, they polluted these wasted gas into air. Like I said before, in order to improve people’s health, we need to clean the environment.
Water pollution can also be an threaten to people’s health, it can be more serious than air pollution, because the water that people drank, it will be absorbed into their body, instead of accumulate in their lung. So it is more important to deal with the water pollution. These polluted water also came from some factories. For example, a movie talked about some chemical factories polluted some water that contains chromium or other harmful materials into the nearby river. When people drank water from that river, they’ll suffer from a disease, and it can’t be solved. So as a result, it is important to clean people’s health.
Admittedly, people may in a bad health because of themselves. These days, food is more delicious than before, but they may contain more fat. So, it is unhealthier than before, but people would also like to eat them. Compared with the environment pollution, it is not an important factor that’ll affect people’s health, moreover, people’s self-discipline has also improved. Environment problems should also be the most fundamental factor.
All in all, the basic and the pending problem is that we need to clean the environment. Only through this, we could finally improve our health while we can also keep the global economy growing in a normal pace. As a famous poet mentioned before ” If we even don’t have a good environment, we have no meaning in life.” So everyone should help to protect the environment to get a better world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2356.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08855291577 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70713642476 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470842332613 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5429470506 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.625 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.46875 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.03125 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186103954136 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626435115014 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740793890502 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117627599728 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428146061976 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.65 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.