Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The most important ways to improve the people’s health is to clean the environment.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, as the unremitting development of high-tech, industry and so on, the environment has become not as good as before. This utterly influenced people’s health and may lead to health problem in the upcoming days. To improve people’s health, I disagree with the statement. There are extras actions to be motivated.
The self-awareness of people themselves are completely essential to their own health, though the living circumstance may be a factor, but self-awareness is the top priority. They ought to have a good habitat, such as eating, having enough sleeping time and so on. The time they organized themselves, they become healthy. The environment is just the outer factor, not the core. Like I have a friend whose life is disordered, he oversleep, buy delivered food, as time passed by, became less healthier, but as soon as he changed his habit, gradually, he became much healthier than before.
Another effective way is let the local government approve a law that is related to people’s health. They can restrict some bad things that may harm people’s health. Like closing the restaurants which aren’t qualified, or ask people to do more exercise outdoor. Exercising is the core to maintain people’s health and it works indeed.
So apart from clean the environment, we can also do some extra actions to maintain our health, and what I mentioned above are good actions that supposed to be widespread.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'oversleeps'.
Suggestion: oversleeps
...e a friend whose life is disordered, he oversleep, buy delivered food, as time passed by,...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 485, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less healthy'?
Suggestion: less healthy
...livered food, as time passed by, became less healthier, but as soon as he changed his habit, g...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, apart from, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1202.0 1977.66487455 61% => OK
No of words: 233.0 407.700716846 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15879828326 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.939102673 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618025751073 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 360.9 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9602608536 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8571428571 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6428571429 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07142857143 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177401704277 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743027327926 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0975140957511 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114567630812 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681779182001 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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