A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (age14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans:
1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school.
2. Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually.
It is universally acknowledged that education plays an extremely important role in a person’s life. Hence it is imperative for students to receive higher quality of study and teacher should improve their teaching methodology. In my opinion, improving teacher’s teaching by means of online training is more effective. My points and examples are given below.
Firstly, study individually on the computer for each teacher can reduce more loss of time on training. If teachers are asked to improve their teaching quality via such a constant barrage of measures from the first point given in the material. Teachers, especially among these excellent teachers, would firstly consume their time in attending the meetings, which means students would lose the chance of studying certain subjects from part of their teachers. Even though teachers’ comprehensive method of teaching has been improved, they have to complement the courses left by their students, which can cause the additional consumption of time. However, if teachers are allowed to study individually by using their Internet, they can not only impart the essential knowledge to their students but also keeping in line with learning the effective teaching tactics in time. From this point, teachers can minimize the total loss of time on teaching and also they could also take their fresh-learned skills into practice.
Furthermore, as every teacher’s teaching style and the comprehensive atmosphere of every class seems to be distinct from each other, so individual study by every teacher can better enable them to adjust their teaching method themselves in time corresponding to their own class. If the teachers would improve their teaching quality by means of having such the training meeting from a expert, they might mostly have less access to various ways of teaching and might consume more time just on adjusting their methods relating to their own class. However, if teacher can study individually, they can better analyze and improve their teaching methods in time. For example, if a teacher can study individually at home, then once he has learned something that seems to be effective, then he can apply this method to his class in time in the next class to confirm whether the strategy is efficient and acceptable to his students or not. If not, the he can continue to have the training courses himself and then adjust or change the teaching method, hence a chance of many practical trial can finally lead to an effective and appropriate measure of teaching. On the other hand, the process and effectiveness of the measure of having the training meeting can really be regarded as a more costly way.
Admittedly, I am not saying that the tactic of having the successive meeting is always ineffective, the expert might sometimes actually possess more effective knowledge and measures, which is appropriate to all the students of every individual class. And it is also effective if most of the teachers in the school are not skillful which actually needs more direct instruction rather than self-study for them. But compared to the overall advantage of teachers’ self-improvement, that is only a small point at all! Due to the limitation of space, I am unable to give more examples and cases, but I believe that the ideas above have already proven the validity of my point of view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, really, so, then, for example, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2816.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 547.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14808043876 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78225513232 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45886654479 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 867.6 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.0427673465 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.210526316 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7894736842 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47368421053 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297781410411 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113046597506 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669574996145 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200081187978 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538857134341 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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