people should never make an important decision alone
In the last three decades, the concept of making a decision has become a crucial issue in everyone's life. Some people believe that a person should make an important decision alone; however, there is a substantial body of evidence claims that people should integrate information from others before making any decision. From a personal perspective, sharing others is significant decisions is essential given that it could help people to make realistic decisions and be more successful. Below I will strive to explain my supporting points in more detail.
The first and foremost point, provided that people ask others for advice, they could make optimal decisions. A vivid example that could be given to shed light on that is high school students who want to admit to a school, usually include their parents to opt for a prestigious university. To put it in other words, their parents could help them to analyze weaknesses and strengthens aspects in each university, so they could help their kids to make realistic decisions. Furthermore, parents usually know a family's financial situation, and they make sure that their children understand what they are able to contribute to tuition fees and any other college-related costs. As a result, high school students who involve their parents before making important decisions are more supported.
Next, coupled with making optimal decisions, being more productive is another benefit of sharing others in decisions. For Instance, last year, my brother opened his own business; however, before making this important decision, he asked various people who have the experience of running a private business. Moreover, he counseled many bank accounters to ask for advice, which made him felt more comfortable. Consequently, his project started to grow very quickly since he knew what he should do and what he should not. Now, he could build up his life with prosperity. Therefore, making important decisions with others is essential for a better future.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, people who include others when they make an important decision are not only more successful, but also more comfortable. It is suggested that schools design learning activities oi help their students to make optimal decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...rivate business. Moreover, he counseled many bank accounters to ask for advice, which mad...
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...eir students to make optimal decisions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for instance, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32777777778 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80079216087 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547222222222 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0025950856 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.823529412 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1764705882 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29760689721 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10595943289 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10749723667 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215861558621 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102472261389 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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