People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, people are totally involved with different facet of technology such laptops, computers, cellphones, and so on facilitated world’s life. There have been fierce debates among people whether people spend more leisure time on favorite work or what should be done in daily life. Although some people inclined that paramount work should be considered in longevity, I firmly believe that the hustle and bustle of world and the growth of technology have led to one take more recreation time. In the ensuring paragraph, I will delve into most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite reason that makes me hold the belief that is people are obsessed with routine life. Besides, enormous problems are being engendered in lifespan in which people counter. As a result their lives are going to be stressful and nerve-racking. Indeed, inordinate amount of their time spend on doing desirable things. Perhaps an example can shed more light on the matter. I well recall that last year when I was working in an architecture firm where my schedule workday was 9 o’clock to 15o’clock. every day I came back home utterly exhausted. While this scenario continued this way, I have taken gym courses three days a week to enhance my energy and my excess time revolved around hanging out and shopping some stuff making me delighted.
Another reason deserving some words here is development of the technology. Thank to advent technology, various sorts of electronic devices such as laptops, cellphones, computers along with emerging of communication technologies such as internet and wireless have produced a good opportunity for people to spend their time on browsing, chatting, and doing other kinds of their favorite activities. Through the internet and cable TV, watching favorite movies are more convenient than every other time. they can easily search what they are looking for, and sit relax in their home and watch the movie on their TV or laptops. Therefore, one of the main reasons supporting my viewpoint is easy access to modern technological inventions.
In summation, pursuant what I mentioned above, one can realize that the present generation emphasize personal enjoyment over professional obligation since quality of life and development of the technology. I strongly recommend that parents should teach children not be involved whole time in their duties.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30952380952 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82460529309 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621693121693 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.8970764426 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.631578947 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8947368421 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161629007723 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441782011506 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444845735144 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0888889909342 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292511546012 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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