A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

Traveling is one of the most incredible things you can do in life. Because although there are some negative things, positive ones outweigh them. If a friend of mine were going to move to my town –Marcabeli-, he would be really glad to find natural places and have a great climate. However, not everything is good, there are some things he needs to know in order to cope with Marcabeli’s bad things such as gossips.

First of all, as for to the things my friend could like about Marcabeli, I can say that the nature is amazing, there is a bunch of natural sites to visit, Yikinaku is one example, it is a reserved natural area where there is a great river which falls down from a big stone forming cascades. I remember when my friend from Iceland was there, at first her cheeks turned pink and her facial expression said that she was staring something from another world. Later on, we went into the river and passed a good time. Furthermore, people are so kind in my town, always you need help they can help you. For instance, I was walking really one day really thirsty, and a family suddenly offered me a jar of water. People see what you lack in, and they fill it.

Secondly, among the negative things according to my view are the gossip people. As people do not have much to do they go into spread rumors. To illustrate this, let me take my last relationship as an example, three years ago, I met my now girlfriend. We were in the same college grade and we fooled around over the town, in the beginning, everything was tough because her parents were told that their daughter was always kissing with me –which was not false-, but one surprising thing was that people had said we were having sex in public spaces. Her parents came toward me so angry and they forbid me to see her. I struggled a lot to explain that it was not true, later on, everything came to the light. This is how something could turn out into a lie suddenly just by the spreading of rumors.

To sum up, I strongly believe that my friend would have a good time living in my town. This is because there are beautiful places to visit and because even though people gossip and create rumors, you could turn them into a true.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, as for, as to, for instance, such as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41911764706 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3509680759 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7542091383 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8947368421 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101370933071 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.035299859452 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384015301194 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741006447461 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245010763739 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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