As the technologies advance more and more nowadays, we human are almost impossible to live without digital devices. For children nowadays, digital devices such as computer and iPad can play important role in their lives. While some people might think playing computer game is a waste of time and thus they prohibit their children to spend time on it. However, I personally think children shouldn't be prevented from playing computer games. My opinion is based on intelligence developing, social and training for self-control reasons, which I will explore in the following passages.
First and foremost, there are myriad types of computer games on the Internet, and some of them are developed with the purpose for helping children who are not intellectually mature to develop interest in several aspects of real-life topics such as the nature, physics, mathematics, space and so on. Take my cousin for example, she was exposed to a game featured building a virtual world using blocks of different shapes. Since she wanted to know how to build something extraordinary in comparison to the houses she encountered in real life, she tried to combine blocks and elements in thousands of ways creatively. She was so familiar with the concept of space that she even has the dream of being an architecturer in the future.
Second, from a social point of view, children will get along with their peers if they have more common topics to talk about. Therefore, once children are deprived of the time of playing computer games, there might be less connection between their peers who know about the trendy games and themselves. Children will have a sense of being isolated if they know nothing about what their peers are enthusiastic about currently.
Last but not least, playing computer games can be a method of training children for exercise they will to develop the ability of self-control. Parents can allow the children to play computer games under certain conditions such as finishing the homework or helping cleaning the kitchen before touching the computer, and can regulate the daily duration of playing games online. My cousin is again the perfect example for this. Because she has this "contract" with her mother about playing games on iPad, my cousin does her homework efficiently once she gets home. Learning how be productive and distributing your own time is an important lesson for children undoubtedly.
To sum up, I do not agree with the idea that children should not be allowed to play any computer game because it will deprive them of the opportunities of developing intelligence of various aspects, the firm connections they could enjoy with their peers, and the chances to learn self-control.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2279.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12134831461 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79274946324 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523595505618 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7904742656 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.611111111 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7222222222 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423532898371 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134785597381 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121034342069 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243304796764 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.097210282148 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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