Question :Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Controversy exists over whether parents should spend their free time with children to be fun or doing homework and schoolworks. While some argue that schoolwork is necessary, In my opinion, spending time around palying game or sports are beneficial for children.
The first reason is that it is more attractive for both parents and children, when parents spend their limited time with children by playing game or doing sports. Nowadays, life in the fast lane has turned out to be so hectic and tedious for parents and even children. Similarly, people are trying to find a way to be involved in some activity and enjoy it. At a same time, children always tend to play games or do sports in their free time and have a fun. Therefore, palying games is a best opportunities of both parents and children. In addition, these activities are often beneficial for them in terms of enjoyment and educational content. In terms of enjoyment, users, children and parents, are transported in to a virtual world that is more engaging and exciting than other acticities. Also, from an educational prespective, these games can encourage them in terms of imagination, creativity, as well as concentration, logical thinking and problem solving, all of which are useful task outside of enjoyment context. It has been shown that playing games or sports not only improve user's motor skill but also can help to prepare them for real world tasks.
Another more subtle point is that when parents spend their time with their children to have a fun situation, children attitude form socially. Today, school work is not as demanding and challenging as it used to because teacher can help them in different aspects and clould help them to be on top on attending class everyday. On the other hand, If parents put their children under schoolwork pressure, they will expereince loneliness, isolation, wory, even they may miss out the emotional supports for e few more hours they spend on schooltask. As a result, when they have free time, it is better to encourage them to enjoy it than to doing homework and exam revision. If this is were the case, for example, children have a chance to develop their talent by mixing with their parents, exchange their ideas about those funny taks.
In conclusion, parents should spend their free time with children around some activities that are more engging and exciting because are both attractive for parents and children, and have positive effects of social features of children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...lp them to be on top on attending class everyday. On the other hand, If parents put thei...
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Message: Did you mean 'where'?
Suggestion: where
... homework and exam revision. If this is were the case, for example, children have a ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... homework and exam revision. If this is were the case, for example, children have a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, similarly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97846889952 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62848992254 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497607655502 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3030486938 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.411764706 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5882352941 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64705882353 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394595025221 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142308388863 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114901900963 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272271767116 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327834648452 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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