With the rapid development of the Internet, people have more accesses and resources to the private life of famous entertainers and athletes and many people enjoy the anecdotes of celebrities. As far as I am concerned, celebrities need more privacy than they have now, and I will illustrate the reason why I feel this way.
First and foremost, famous people even lost the basic privacy of their daily life nowadays. Some people may argue that it is the obligation for celebrities to show more information about themselves to the public. It is true; however, we have to acclaim that the public information of famous entertainer and athletes is more than the necessary. For instance, a news recently is that you can buy an identification number of a popular star with only 1 dollar. It is apparent that you can even not buy the identification number of a common person as easy as this. Furthermore, there are some teams who specialize in take private photos of celebrities' relationship. So, these two examples clearly demonstrates that celebrities lost the foundational private information of themselves.
In addition, if we do not protect the private of celebrities, it set a terrible example for teenagers, which means teenager will feel it is acceptable to violate the privacy of others. This will ruin the basic respect between people and the moral rules we have built, because teenagers are likely to copy the behaviors of media. I have to admit that I built up this opinion from my personal experience. Three years ago, I accompanied with my little nephew and we watched TV together. Then, the bears in the displaying cartoon played a dangerous game. Though it is evident a fake show on TV, I found my nephew played the same dangerous game alone two days later. This example of my nephew illustrates that teenager and children are possible to mimicry the bad behaviors of media, so it significant important for media to behave well.
All in all, I firmly believe that famous athletes and entertainers deserve more private space in the future.
With the rapid development of the Internet, people have more accesses and resources to the private life of famous entertainers and athletes and many people enjoy the anecdotes of celebrities. As far as I am concerned, celebrities need more privacy than they have now, and I will illustrate the reason why I feel this way.
First and foremost, famous people even lost the basic privacy of their daily life nowadays. Some people may argue that it is the obligation for celebrities to show more information about themselves to the public. It is true; however, we have to acclaim that the public information of famous entertainer and athletes is more than the necessary. For instance, a news recently is that you can buy an identification number of a popular star with only 1 dollar. It is apparent that you can even not buy the identification number of a common person as easy as this. Furthermore, there are some teams who specialize in take private photos of celebrities' relationship. So, these two examples clearly demonstrates that celebrities lost the foundational private information of themselves.
In addition, if we do not protect the private of celebrities, it set a terrible example for teenagers, which means teenager will feel it is acceptable to violate the privacy of others. This will ruin the basic respect between people and the moral rules we have built, because teenagers are likely to copy the behaviors of media. I have to admit that I built up this opinion from my personal experience. Three years ago, I accompanied with my little nephew and we watched TV together. Then, the bears in the displaying cartoon played a dangerous game. Though it is evident a fake show on TV, I found my nephew played the same dangerous game alone two days later. This example of my nephew illustrates that teenager and children are possible to mimicry the bad behaviors of media, so it significant important for media to behave well.
All in all, I firmly believe that famous athletes and entertainers deserve more private space in the future.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2020-12-30 | Junjie Yue | 80 | view |
- global 70
- People who develop many different skills are more successful 70
- Most times we think the people who are taking in charge can decide the future of our society while young people who have less power have little influence to the world On the contrary I hold the firm belief that young people are having strong influence to 73
- debating if developing various skills can be more helpful for career 70
- It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another 88
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, well, for instance, i feel, in addition, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9450867052 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88601000701 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543352601156 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0985759626 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.647058824 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3529411765 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412818969277 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1176634049 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.160956159839 0.0737576698707 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301815213975 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.265221428869 0.0645574589148 411% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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