Should parents spend more time to play with children or to help with their study?
It goes without saying that today in this sophisticated and busy world where we like, finding addequate time to spend with children has concernd parents in great distance. Many parents are busy with their job to afford life nessecities, furthermore main daytime of a kid spends on school. It is a great matter to have quality time with family members in limited time. With many parents prefer to use this short time practicing and discussing their childrens' schoolworks with them, I personaly hold a view to spend such time with games or fun activities. More especification about my viewpoint are elaborated into the following essay.
To begin with, by spending free times on having fun or practicing some games or sport, both parents and children could talk more easily and freely about their everyday life problems while playing. It is no secret to anyone that the joy of games would fresh and cheer up one's personality so that they are more acceptanct to hear and discuss unpleasure events; As a result, if a person has been prepared to hear bad news, he could handle the situation more easily compare to time when he is tired or not being in good mood. To illustrate more, a friend of mine did not good on his entrance exam for a university that his father had wished him to study in. Consequently, not reaching to minimum points reported in results, had he not being able to enroll in that university, therefore he was very afraid to tell his busy father and disappointed him, so he kept his secret for a week. However, after a week when they were on -father and son- camping, with the strong friendly bond shaped in nature, he finally told his father the truth and his father reaction was much better than my friend imagined so.
Secondly, every individual needs some free time to rest and fresh up in order to gain energy and motivation to continue their goal, resting after school or work is no exception. A great amount time of children spends in school, if they had a rough day and had to practice more about their hard topics after school, they will eventually get exhausted and they would even dislike their course of study; facing their tired parents that force them to try harder without motivation or fun will also worsen the situation. For example, my sister was always complaind about staying at home during her final exames. She always wanted and begged my father to let her stay with her friend in her home. Years later when we commemorated out childhood she explained to me that my father attitude at dinner table to talk about school made her nervours and stressful so she was looking for a way to get out and rest without thinking about her exames.
In conclusion, with the reasons and examples provided, I believe both parents and children need to relax and enjoy their time together, specially when it is hard to find enough time with each other. Making quality bond with each and get mentaly motivation to carry on by resting are the main reasons that could be the consequences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2484.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69565217391 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4473369812 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.7671173838 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.117647059 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1176470588 20.6045352989 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11764705882 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355512476382 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129086531892 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11653372664 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250595959331 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125052686106 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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