Some believe that spending more time being far away from the people we care about, because it is necessary for people to understand the importance of relationships of people we care about, while other think being away from people we care about can damage our relationships with them.
From many erudite thinkers' point of view, we are living in an age in which having a good relationships plays a far-reaching role as far as social and family solidarity is concerned all over the world. Furthermore, in numerous circles of researchers and scholars, whereas some are inclined toward the opinion that people should spend more time being far away from those who we care about in order to understand the importance of relationships of people we care about, on the other extreme of the rope, it can damage our relationships. While both sides take their own positions, from my vantage point, the latter attitude carries more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into some conspicuous aspects which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
The first aspect of the current discussion which demands a keen contemplation is that if we spend time away from people that we care about them, they may feel that they are no important for us and it can be latent danger that can jeopardize our relationship. In other words, being away from them and not having a constant relationship may be they feel that we are apathetic and this is pathetic for them. Furthermore, what may come as a surprise is proliferation of varying evidences suggesting that about 60 percent of divorces in my country are related to those families that the fathers of the families always are on travel especially for work to earn money. Actually, these fathers sacrifice their family for money by putting a heavy demand on their time and they cannot be around to care about their family.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate and vindicate my standpoint concerned with this issue is that if we are not near to those who are cared about, they can readily find new friends as in this competitive world it is not a big deal. Indeed, our friends cannot stay up until we become free to care about them. For example, in college I lived in dormitory and I had a close girl friend from China and I always tried to help her in one way or another. But, after my graduation I ended up coming back to my country, Iran, and now I see on the Facebook the pictures of my girlfriend with a new boy. So, being away from my friend stopped and damaged a relationship.
To put everything in a nutshell, a broad look over the main points and discussions reveals the fact that our relationship with those who are cared about by ourselves can be endangered if we be away from them for a long time since in this way they will feel impersonal and also, if they are our friends, they can find new friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 335, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
... and not having a constant relationship may be they feel that we are apathetic and thi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'whereas', 'while', 'for example', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.19 0.229887763892 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.156 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.072 0.0866891130778 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.05 0.046263068375 108% => OK
Pronouns: 0.102 0.0685040099705 149% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.162 0.118717715034 136% => OK
Participles: 0.034 0.0351676179071 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67174630047 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.024 0.0309702414327 77% => OK
Particles: 0.002 0.00188951952338 106% => OK
Determiners: 0.092 0.0887237588012 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.028 0.0209618222197 134% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.016 0.0139019557991 115% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2590.0 2387.08602151 109% => OK
No of words: 462.0 408.028673835 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60606060606 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.279220779221 0.338922669872 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.199134199134 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.138528138528 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0995670995671 0.112833075102 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67174630047 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 57.3235473969 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6684587814 68% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.5533526081 161% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.2985154308 48.84282405 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 185.0 120.699889404 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 20.5533526081 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 52.9134199134 45.7405998639 116% => OK
Elegance: 1.25324675325 1.45489161554 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422879083444 0.300154397459 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103874158196 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.088523615922 0.0752933317313 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.538031464976 0.497263757937 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.193499466415 0.151897553556 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167017702855 0.114077575197 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143204282486 0.0781384742642 183% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.367645512681 0.336927656856 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0106928075833 0.067059652881 16% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291812753182 0.210909579961 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130519912421 0.0618886996521 211% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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