Some believe that one should spend more time being far away from the people we care about, because it is necessary for people to understand the importance of relationship of people we care about, while others think being away from people we care about can damage our relationships with them. Which one do you agree with? Why?
There are some moot points about improving a relationship with people who are important for us. The question of whether it is better to ignore these people or not has aroused as a subject of controversy among psychologists. Everyone has their own zeitgeist. When it comes to my position, I strongly subscribe to the point that we should spend much time with people who we care about them to improve our relationship. I have some reasons two of which will be explicated hereunder.
The first reason worth discussing is that one of the most significant aspects which ameliorate the relationship is being in touch with people who we care about. If we relinquish someone from meeting they will Gradually omit from our life. There is a famous proverb in the Persian language which states that somebody eliminates from our heart when they are hidden from our sight. As a case in the point I vividly remember when I was a student I had a close friend who named Mahdi, wh had a close relationship for many years. When I went to military service I could not saw Mahdi for two years after that both of us forgot our great friendship era and found new friends. The corollary of Disconnecting my relationship with Mahdi leads to missing my best friend. My personal experience competently corroborates to the point that disconnecting with any friends give rise to finishing the great relationship between two friends.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned is that spending less time with people who care about lead to these people feel they are far from us and cut their relationship with us. In each communication, the first thing which fortifies that is feeling great emotion toward each other. This emotion leads to friends tells everything to their close friend. When this emotion decrease the communication weaken and each one tends to find another friend, therefore, a relationship can damage easily. My personal example demonstrates this reality when I had a close friend in my workplace. We have had a relationship for five years. In order to the great passion between us, we decided to migrate to another country in tandem, therefore, we plan for migration. Owing to changing my friend workplace we saw each other less than before. This issue lead to our feeling toward us decrease gradually and after one year we forgot our goal to migrate to another country. Now I and my friend have not any communication with each other and there is any emotion between us. My personal experience shed some light to the point that declining in communication give rise to forgetting that.
In the nutshell according to the aforementioned reasons we should spend much time with people who we care about because decreasing the relationship not only weaken our feeling but also damage the relationship between people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
...p with people who are important for us. The question of whether it is better to ignore these people or ...
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Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...in touch with people who we care about. If we relinquish someone from meeting they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2344.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89352818372 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80553327371 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450939457203 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7391266678 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9583333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32411172707 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986095601512 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11166528253 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264534381252 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759550101588 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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