People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.
There are some moot points about why people work. The question of whether people work for earning money or other reasons has aroused as a subject of controversy among academicians. When it comes to my position, by weighing up the various aspects, I strongly subscribe to the point that people work for making a good future and being in touch by other people. I have some reasons the most outstanding of which will be explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason worth discussing here is that needless to say that humans have various goals in their life. One of the most significant goals is having the best life in the future, therefore, they try to reach this aim in a logical manner. As a consequence, work helps them to make more money and save a small amount of that for their future. As a case to the point, I vividly remember when I was a child, my grandfather retire from his work and due to saving a small amount of money during his work, he could go to travel around the world. He advised me to work very well and gain more money to have the best life. My personal experience competently corroborates to the point that one of the most important aspects of work is having a good future.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned here is that although, earning money is the first reason for working but, some people work to have a connection with various people. Work help them to make many friendships. As a result, make a relationship is very important for some people who are a sociable person. My personal example demonstrates this reality. My close friend Mahdi is growing up in a rich family. They have not needed to work because they have much building and earn too much money from those rents. But Mahdi is an industrious person and work very hard. When I asked the reason for hard-working he mentioned that work helped him to make friendship and connection with various people and it is very crucial for him. My personal example shed some light to the point that works help people to be in touch with various individuals.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, I reiterate that, there are many reasons for working among people. In my perspective work not only help people to make a good future life but also, ameliorates their relationship with others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
...some moot points about why people work. The question of whether people work for earning money or other ...
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Line 2, column 221, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a logical manner" with adverb for "logical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
..., therefore, they try to reach this aim in a logical manner. As a consequence, work helps them to m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, as a result, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62227602906 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58552335611 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462469733656 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7640106547 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9047619048 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326039466004 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111616436472 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587310819193 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214103700043 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515000850638 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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