At some colleges and universities, during the first few days or weeks of school, events are planned so that new students will get to know other students. Which ONE of the following events do you think would best help new students get to know other students? Why?
-Participating in games or sports competitions together
-Going on a trip together for several days
-Working together on a community service project to improve some aspect of life in the local area.
What event should students participate in to make acquaintance with other students arouses a heated debate. Some people think that students should take part in games or sport competitions. Others claim that going on a trip for several days is better. Still others maintain that working together on a community service project is more favorable. For me, I believe that participating in games or sports competition is more ideal. My reasons are as follows
To begin with, in order to let students know other people during the first few days of school, universities must actively interact with others. And apparently, organizing events that help students participate in games or sports can provide students opportunities to interact with others and understand each other better. Take my university as an example. My college encourage students to join a Minecraft competition server established by school faculties during the first week of school. Through hanging around in the virtual world, I frequently interacted with new students via chatting in the dialect box and playing virtual parkour. As a result, I became familiar with nearly all new students in less than two weeks. Contrarily, if I worked together with new students in a community project during the first few week, such as donating some food to economically disadvantaged families in my town. Then, we might become extremely busy collecting money and preparing for fresh food. If this is the case, then we won't have that much chance to interact with each other, not to mention making acquaintance with new people. So evidently, letting students interact with others undoubtedly help them get familiar with new people.
In addition, people like to make friends with others who share similar hobbies. Hence, if the university planned some events that aided students in discovering others who share the same interest during the first few days of school, students can definitely know more new pupils. As an example, my college once required every students to pick a sport competition that interest me the most on the fifth day of my school. Thus, I attended a badminton competition event when I was a freshman, and I discovered several students who were better at badminton than me. Eventually, I asked them to teach me advanced badminton skills, and several days later, we became close friends. On the other hand, during my brother's second week of school, his university forced every freshman student to go on a hiking trip on Yanmingshan National Park for four days. Nevertheless, everyone had different interests, and nobody enjoyed observing flowers and trees in the national park. Hence, most students were playing Nintendo NDS or watching Youtube videos alone, and my brither did not get acquainted with a single person during the trip.
In conclusion, I maintain that participating in games or sports competition is more ideal due to the aforementioned reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
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Line 3, column 813, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun week seems to be countable; consider using: 'few weeks'.
Suggestion: few weeks
...in a community project during the first few week, such as donating some food to economic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, hence, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, thus, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.194092827 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81065554252 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514767932489 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2628557408 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.583333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54166666667 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438965932258 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127850554179 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110714251998 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235239686706 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146665613667 0.0645574589148 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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