At some colleges and universities, during the first few days or weeks of school, events are planned so that new students will get to know other students. Which ONE of the following events do you think would best help new students get to know other students? Why?
-Participating in games or sports competitions together
-Going on a trip together for several days (for example, traveling to visit an important park or historical site)
-Working together on a community service project to improve some aspect of life in the local area (for example, by collecting food to give to people who cannot afford to buy food)
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
What event should students participate in to make acquaintance with other students arouses a heated debate. Some people think that students should take part in games or sport competitions. Others claim that going on a trip for several days is better. Still others maintain that working together on a community service project is more favorable. For me, I believe that participating in games or sports competition is more ideal. My reasons are as follows
To begin with, in order to let students know other people, school must actively interact with others. And apparently, letting students participate in games or sports provides students opportunities to interact with others. Take my university as an example. My college encourage students to join a Minecraft competition server established by school faculties. Through hanging around in the virtual world, I frequently interacted with new students via chatting in the dialect box and playing virtual parkour. As a result, I became familiar with nearly all new students in less than two weeks. Contrarily, if I worked together with new students in a community project, such as donating some food to economically disadvantaged families in my town. Then, we might become extremely busy collecting money and preparing for fresh food. If this is the case, then we won't have that much chance to interact with each other, not to mention making acquaintance with new people.
In addition, people like to make friends with others who share similar hobbies, so aiding students in discovering others who share the same interest is another approach to help students know each other. As an example, my college once required every students to pick a sport competition that interest me the most. Thus, I attended a badminton competition event when I was a freshman, and I discovered several students who were better at badminton than me. Eventually, I asked them to teach me advanced badminton skills, and several days later, we became close friends. On the other hand, my brother's university forced every freshman student to go on a hiking trip on Yanmingshan National Park for four days. Nevertheless, everyone had different interests, and nobody enjoyed observing flowers and trees in the national park. Hence, most students were playing Nintendo NDS or watching Youtube videos alone, and my brither did not get acquainted with a single person during the trip.
In conclusion, I maintain that participating in games or sports competition is more ideal due to the aforementioned reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 252, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...g on a trip for several days is better. Still others maintain that working together o...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, hence, if, nevertheless, so, still, then, thus, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23341523342 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87498476017 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562653562654 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9202514302 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8181818182 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348213548978 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100003823945 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740643423502 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184338897552 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107489338672 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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