In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?
What is the best method for the government to improve safety and attract tourists arouses a heated debate. Some argue that hiring more police is a better way to tackle this problem, while others maintain that repairing old buildings and streets is a more ideal approach. Personally, I believe that hiring more police is a more favorable solution. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, reducing crime is a great method to appeal tourists, and hiring more police officers can undoubtedly reduce the crime rate and attract more tourists. For instance, the Taipei City government hired 200 police officers before the 2016 Universiade took place. The mayor ordered these police officers to arrest bad guys from harming innocent citizens an tourists, and they eventually apprehended more than 100 drug dealers, gang members, and kidnappers in less than a month. Two months later, the crime rate dropped from 3% to nearly 0.1%, and most tourists are willing to visit Taipei because they heard of this news. So according to my city government's experience, employing more police can help the city ameliorate crimes and enhance tourism.
On the other hand, repairing old streets and buildings will not interest tourists. First of all, most citizens relish local cultures and religions, but fixing old buildings will alter the original shape and meanings of a certain building. For example, many foreign tourists wanted to experience festivals held in Taoism temples in Taiwan. However, the government decided to attract more tourists and renew the most famous temple in Taipei, as known as the "Long San Temple", by repainting the with red lacquer. In addition, the government also tried to reestablish some roads that were full of pits near the temple. Nevertheless, several tourists were upset that the most essential historical building is fixed, and the environment did not fully represent the Taiwanese culture. The disappointment led to a horrible review on Google map, and several years later, the number of visitors decreased dramastically.
In conclusion, I believe that hiring more police is the best way to enhance safety due to the aforementioned reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an tourist' or simply 'tourists'?
Suggestion: an tourist; tourists
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, nevertheless, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27011494253 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73161469706 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577586206897 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7115426625 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.882352941 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.29411764706 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37199917185 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109960519443 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944211755575 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248530729898 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117643303429 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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