In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?
Tourism and leisure are the most important pillars of each society in today’s world. Due to the fact, there are a number of factors that we can use to improve the tourism industry in our nation, we have to consider the marginal features that can affect it. A controversial question that is often raised regarding this issue is whether the government should hire more police, to increase the rate of tourism in the country or whether repair historical buildings. Some people possess the conviction that the latter is more agreeable for tourism attraction, whereas I think hiring more police is more fruitful. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind elucidates my standpoint is that social safety plays an important role in society. In particular, we can say the driving force behind improving improve tourism attraction is safety, w. Where people feel they can spend their time with fewer levels level of stress and tension. Consider my personal experience to make this point more clear. In 2015, I traveled to Paris, it was after the ISIS attack on Paris. There were more security guards in the streets and they totally blocked the main streets for checking. Although I felt stressed, seeing the police ensured that I had a safe time during my travel.
The second rationale reason behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that repairing old buildings and streets calls to question the fact of tourism. People want to see the history of those countries and it goes without saying that repairing old buildings completely changes the meaning of them. Lately, the government has been getting to grips with preserving old buildings and their decisions need a lot of money. We can use this budget to raise awareness of our guests' knowledge to follow up our safety and emergency procedures, like the invention of technological devices which help them to listen to the radio or television for information from local officials in their own language in their hotels.
In brief, due to the aforementioned reasons, I think we can increase the tourism rate by improving social safety and making wise decisions about how to preserve old materials in the building instead of repairing them. It is anticipated consideration these features will improve the rate of tourist attraction in our country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, regarding, second, so, whereas, i think, in brief, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03768844221 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68949047332 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557788944724 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2276018507 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.388888889 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279679838914 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774818633736 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696715231975 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163411891691 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370058379956 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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