In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?
What is the best method for the government to improve safety and attract tourists arouses a heated debate. Some argue that hiring more police is a better way to tackle this problem, while others maintain that repairing old buildings and streets is a more ideal approach. Personally, I believe that hiring more police is a more favorable solution. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, reducing crime is a great method to appeal tourists, and hiring more police officers can undoubtedly reduce the crime rate and attract more tourists. For instance, the Taipei City government hired 200 police officers before the 2016 Universiade took place. The mayor ordered these police officers to arrest bad guys from harming innocent citizens an tourists, and they eventually apprehended more than 100 drug dealers, gang members, and kidnappers in less than a month. Two months later, the crime rate dropped from 3% to nearly 0.1%, and most tourists are willing to visit Taipei because they heard of this news. So according to my city government's experience, employing more police can help the city ameliorate crimes and enhance tourism.
In addition, improving infrastructure is another approach to increase city security, and employing more police officers will definitely improve a city's infrastructure. Take the Taipei City government again as an example. After the government hired hundreds of new police officers, more officers realized that most severe traffic accidents in Taipei City took place in only 12 specific roads. After several investigations, the police figured out that some infrastructure, such as traffic lights, were outdated or broken for years. Consequently, they reported this incident to the mayor, and the Taipei City government sent some technicians to fix it. After that, Taipei City's basic infrastructure improved, several reporter covered this news, and many domestic tourists decided to visit Taipei because they heard that the basic infrastructure have enhanced dramastically.
On the other hand, repairing old streets and buildings will not interest tourists. First of all, most citizens relish local cultures and religions, but fixing old buildings will alter the original shape and meanings of a certain building. For example, many foreign tourists wanted to experience festivals held in Taoism temples in Taiwan. However, the government decided to attract more tourists and renew the most famous temple in Taipei, as known as the "Long San Temple", by repainting the with red lacquer. In addition, the government also tried to reestablish some roads that were full of pits near the temple. Nevertheless, several tourists were upset that the most essential historical building is fixed, and the environment did not fully represent the Taiwanese culture. The disappointment led to a horrible review on Google map, and several years later, the number of visitors decreased dramastically.
In conclusion, I believe that hiring more police is the best way to enhance safety due to the aforementioned reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...bad guys from harming innocent citizens an tourists, and they eventually apprehend...
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Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an tourist' or simply 'tourists'?
Suggestion: an tourist; tourists
...bad guys from harming innocent citizens an tourists, and they eventually apprehended more t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2582.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43578947368 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86179843887 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532631578947 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6074788939 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.260869565 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.652173913 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.04347826087 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34008447754 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100068903163 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887291241279 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22684594215 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113810709303 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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