Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves.
Some people think that the most essential goal of education is to educate people on how to teach themselves, while others disagree. For me, I agree with the statement. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, teaching students knowledge should be considered a top priority when it comes to a successful education. Therefore, educating people on how to educate themselves helps student acquire more knowledge. Take my friend Todd as an example. Todd’s parent educated him to become a self-taught programmer. He learned most programming knowledge from Indian programming-related Youtubers. Also, he procured numerous coding techniques by talking and interacting with open-source engineers on Github. Therefore, even though he was still 19 years old, he could answer 80% of questions asked on Stackoverflow. On the contrary, my brother's algorithm professor, Mr. Lieu, set up a strict schedule for his students to follow. His teacher required all students to complete no less than 20 pages of algorithm problem sets every week, but these problems are so hard that each of them may require three months of research and investigation. Eventually, my brother had problems absorbing most algorithm knowledge from Mr. Lieu’s lecture. Evidently, according to Todd and my brother’s experience, I believe self-learning helps students become more knowledgeable.
Secondly, education should be on students' health, and letting students learn skills by themselves makes them healthier. For instance, my friend Linda went through a high-pressure education in Taiwan. Her parents required her to go to English and Physics cram schools nearly every day. Not only that, her math teacher assigned more than four math worksheets per day. Therefore, she slept less than five hours every night. In addition, her constant unhappiness made her get depression and schizophrenia. In the long run, her physical and health condition was so terrible that she needed to go to the hospital for sleeping pills and schizophrenia treatments. Contrarily, my aunt allowed my cousin, Ken, to self-teach himself. Therefore, whenever Ken felt exhausted, he could simply take a short rest. Similarly, he had the choice to stop learning when he accidentally caught Bird Flu or Covid without the fear of not being able to accomplish his homework in time. Apparently, he had a healthier body and mental status compared to Linda.
In conclusion, I maintain that teaching people how to educate themselves is extremely vital because the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44303797468 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10562442359 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635443037975 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5222190466 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6923076923 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1923076923 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227934831904 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630517939058 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101672205924 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216656441615 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14054579731 0.0645574589148 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.68 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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