Some charitable organizations (groups that help people in need) allow people who give money to charity to choose how their donations will be used. (For example, people can decide whether their donated money is spent directly on goods and services for people in need or on advertising by the charity.) If you were to give money to charity, would you prefer to choose how your donation is going to be used, or do you think it is more effective to leave that decision to the organization? Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples
Some people prefer giving money to the charity and letting the organization decide how the money should be spent, while others claim that having the right to choose how the donation is going to be used is better. For me, I prefer to choose how my money is going to be utilized. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, whenever I gave away resources to charity, I always want to make sure that charity is doing their work efficiently. Thus, if I was granted the option to determine where my donation should be spent, I could make sure that the charity is doing their job efficiently. This might sound unintuitive, but my own experience can testify to this. I once gave away three million dollars to an NGO to help Ukrainian citizens overcome Russian soldiers. I insisted that my money should be spent on daily necessities, such as fresh food and clean water, instead of weapons. In less than two days, the NGO told me that my resources are successfully sent to the warzone. Perhaps it’s because my demand made the NGO realize my enthusiasm, and they did not want my donation to be procrastinated. On the other hand, my friend, Todd, also donated 3 million dollars to Somalia, but he let the NGO decide where to use that money. Eventually, the NGO used his donation to purchase weapons. Unfortunately, the NGO told my brother that weapon manufacturing is delayed due to the global chip shortage. It was not until the war ended that my brother’s donation arrived in Somalia. So eventually, his donation did not practically help Somalian citizens. Hence, according to my experience, having the choice to decide how the donated resources can aid charities in boosting their working efficiency.
In addition, when I donate some money to charity, I always want to make sure that my money was spent on intended places. Yet, letting charities decide where the donation should be spent cannot help me accomplish the goal. For example, my brother once donated 500000 dollars to the Zanthu Organization in Hualien. Nevertheless, he let the organization determine where his money will be spent. Three weeks later, some journalists reported that Zanthu Organization used 95% of citizens’ donations on investing in real estate and cryptocurrencies. Consequently, my brother was furious that the organization did not use the money in the right places. On the other hand, I once donated 5% of my income as well as some appliances to the Tsiji charity group. I told the chairman of Tsiji that my money should be spent on schizophrenia patients, and the charity accepted my request. Several months later, the charity sent me a receipt which proved to me that my money is properly spent on mental health hospitals, and my second-handed appliances were indeed sent to schizophrenia patients. Indeed, having the right to decide where my donation will eventually go can help me ensure that my money is spent on intended places.
To conclude, I maintain that having the decision to determine where my donation will be spent is a more favorable option considering the aforementioned reasons. That is not to say, of course, that leaving the decision to charity is not appropriate. Nonetheless, I believe that my views are more persuasive and reasonable.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, of course, such as, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2699.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 547.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93418647166 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88467803031 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431444241316 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 846.9 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.72415253 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0689655172 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8620689655 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34482758621 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297574156718 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918978199432 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775387693972 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208673974703 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107338300896 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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