Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy; we should take action now rather than later. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people think that patience is not a good strategy and people should take action immediately instead of procrastinating all the time, while others disagree. For me, I agree that people should be patient and take action now rather than later. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, a good strategy makes people acquire new knowledge, and patience can definitely make people learn a lot of things. For instance, when I was taking a course called Computer Security in my university, the professor required us to read more than 40 cybersecurity related papers at the beginning of the semester. Nonetheless, I decided to take action immediately on the first day of the class. To be more specific, after I was assigned the requirement, I spent more than 6 hours per day pouring over these procure and unfathomable thesis. Eventually, I learned how to spot weaknesses and exploit vulnerabilities when machines are running out-of-date software. In other words, I gained uncountable computer security related knowledge and topics from that class, because I was patient enough to read every papers assigned by my lecturer. On the other hand, I knew that my friend, Todd, decided not to participate in the class after hearing the requirement. This is because he was impatient, and he also liked to procrastinate. Therefore, even thought Todd was interested in cybersecurity, his impatient attitude made him lose a great chance of learning his favorite knowledge. So according to my experience, patience is indeed a powerful strategy, and taking action right away made me learn a significant amount of new knowledge and skills.
In addition, a good strategy should make people become efficient in their work, and patience can undoubtedly make people concentrate. Take my cousin as an example. My cousin worked in a financial company, and he was an extremely patient person. To elaborate, his boss usually gave him three weeks to conduct his research on customer behaviors. Nonetheless, he always started to do his work right after his supervisors gave him a task. When he encountered difficulties like forgetting which functions to call in Excel, he was patient enough to look for a single function online using more than 2 hours. Also, when he got tired of data analysis, he instantly switched to doing other tasks without wasting any time, such as gathering new data from databases. Therefore, his patience made him concentrate on his task, and this made him become extraordinarily efficient in his work. That is, he could often complete his analysis tasks in less than 3 days. Contrarily, my sister also worked in a financial firm, but she tend to take action later instead of immediately. More precisely, she was also frequently assigned with data analysis related problems, but she usually started gathering customers' data 20 days after she received her mission. Eventually, she often spent more than two months finishing her jobs.
In conclusion, I maintain that patience is a wonderful strategy and we should take action as soon as possible considering my points mentioned above. Of course, there are benefits about taking steps later. Nonetheless, I believe that my reasons are more compelling and persuasive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, nonetheless, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, of course, such as, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2699.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15076335878 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95010454146 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522900763359 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 864.9 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8360960634 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3928571429 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17857142857 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189933997468 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562403224235 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626350819399 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161784457574 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809375027437 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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